September 3rd, 2013

Firefly Not taking you seriously

30 Days of Blogging - Day Fourteen. Sometimes I out-do myself.

Laughing like crazy at myself atm. I just re-read a fic that I wrote over ten years ago and it is chock-full of the stuff that annoys me in other works:

It has a character letting out the breath he didn't realise he was holding.

It has an American character thinking about his mum.

It contains POV changes so severe (mid-paragraph, anyone?) you'd get whiplash just trying to follow them.

It tells rather than shows what the characters are feeling and thinking.

It can stay as it is for now, but when I have time I'll look at fixing it up a bit. At least to the point where it doesn't make me point and mock. *g*